Dear Mr. Joe Brown,
I want to thank you for considering me to be on your team of premier writers, I very much appreciate it. The piece I submitted, hits close to home and is dear to my heart. I expose the difference between a well funded school and a school that desperately needs funding.
I want to be honest with you, I had no clue how to start my essay. I was drawing a blank. I finally went into my friends room and asked them if they could help me out. I sat there and listened to what they think about power in education and they kept going back to how the more well funded schools had better education and vice versa for the poorer schools. I usually do fine working alone, but such broad topics makes my brain go haywire. I started writing my paper by typing anything that came to mind. I was finally able to focus on a topic that opens up my perspective.
I feel like I did really well with expressing my perspective and stories. I added facts to show the reader how drastically different the schools were. My solution could've used a little bit more work in the sense of going more into detail about it throughout my piece. I tried to appeal to my audience, who are people in general, that we can't ignore the problem just because it doesn't apply to them directly. Every child should have the same opportunity and education as the next.
Thank you again,
Sincerely,
Jocelyn Pitlick
I want to thank you for considering me to be on your team of premier writers, I very much appreciate it. The piece I submitted, hits close to home and is dear to my heart. I expose the difference between a well funded school and a school that desperately needs funding.
I want to be honest with you, I had no clue how to start my essay. I was drawing a blank. I finally went into my friends room and asked them if they could help me out. I sat there and listened to what they think about power in education and they kept going back to how the more well funded schools had better education and vice versa for the poorer schools. I usually do fine working alone, but such broad topics makes my brain go haywire. I started writing my paper by typing anything that came to mind. I was finally able to focus on a topic that opens up my perspective.
I feel like I did really well with expressing my perspective and stories. I added facts to show the reader how drastically different the schools were. My solution could've used a little bit more work in the sense of going more into detail about it throughout my piece. I tried to appeal to my audience, who are people in general, that we can't ignore the problem just because it doesn't apply to them directly. Every child should have the same opportunity and education as the next.
Thank you again,
Sincerely,
Jocelyn Pitlick