Dear Joe Brown,
The piece of writing that I have submitted is a partly informative and partly argumentative magazine article. My article explores the possibility of public schools adopting a boarding school style model of education. I analyze the benefits of students attending boarding schools and where those benefits stem from. I also discuss evidence for and against my idea. My writing process always begins as a brainstorming session. I let my brain wander, and write down anything and everything that comes to mind regarding my topic. This brainstorming session leaves me with subtopics of discussion, questions, evidence for, and arguments against my ideas. I often struggle at how to conclude my writing. I tend to feel as though I have said everything that I need to say, and don’t want to come across as demeaning to the reader by restating my main points. To overcome my issue of concluding, I reread my entire piece and determine what I want to leave the reader with. Then I try to summarize my topic and main arguments without completely restating my thesis. In addition, I want you to know that I care a great deal about what avenue I present my work in because I think that different venues of writing can be more effective for different topics, as well as different authors. In my article I think I did well presenting my idea with clarity. I was very straightforward with what I think the public school system should do, and why. However I think that I could improve the tone of my writing. I struggle with finding how formal or informal of a tone to use. Additionally, I could refine my conclusion. As I said earlier, I generally struggle concluding which is something that your team of writers could assist me with. Lastly, the audience intended for my article is anyone in America, I believe that everyone has a say in how the education in America functions because everyone goes through the system themselves, has someone they know or love go through the system, or votes on how the system is run. Thank you so much for your consideration, and I look forward to hearing back from you. Sincerely, Danni Noonan Dear Mr. Joe Brown,
I want to thank you for considering me to be on your team of premier writers, I very much appreciate it. The piece I submitted, hits close to home and is dear to my heart. I expose the difference between a well funded school and a school that desperately needs funding. I want to be honest with you, I had no clue how to start my essay. I was drawing a blank. I finally went into my friends room and asked them if they could help me out. I sat there and listened to what they think about power in education and they kept going back to how the more well funded schools had better education and vice versa for the poorer schools. I usually do fine working alone, but such broad topics makes my brain go haywire. I started writing my paper by typing anything that came to mind. I was finally able to focus on a topic that opens up my perspective. I feel like I did really well with expressing my perspective and stories. I added facts to show the reader how drastically different the schools were. My solution could've used a little bit more work in the sense of going more into detail about it throughout my piece. I tried to appeal to my audience, who are people in general, that we can't ignore the problem just because it doesn't apply to them directly. Every child should have the same opportunity and education as the next. Thank you again, Sincerely, Jocelyn Pitlick |
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