In regard to revisions, I have made the standard grammar and spelling revisions and have shifted from my original 1 article per student to 2 per student which adds to the effect of breaking news and the story progression in to more detail. This was the suggestion that was given to me by Matt Friedman. This was the only revision suggested. These changes effect the intensity of the articles and the reader stays more engaged.
What could I have exaggerated more or added more emphasis on to get the point across clearly? Did the length of it interfere with the coherence of the story (too short or too long)? Should I have provided statistics even though news articles of this caliber do not normally include statistics?
I am most proud of how I was able to write about a serious topic and add some educational information and opinion all while being engaging to the audience. I felt like I was extremely creative and this is one of my best pieces of literature I have ever written. I used a good attention getter by adding a very dramatic story line. This combined with the sharp journalistic paragraphs really made for a successful newspaper article.
Luis Peraza