After having my rough draft reviewed, as a whole my editors suggested having an inclusion of more statistics to emphasize my argument of the unfairness of the IB program, while also making it sound more believable rather than solely personal. Reading over my unessay, I decided to take their advice, for I imagined myself reading this hypothetically having no knowledge or experience with the IB program and I concluded it to sound very opinionated and unreliable. There weren’t very opportunities for statistics to be involved in my piece, though it did fit well when I mentioned college acceptance rates. I used them to emphasize the unfair advantage that full IB students have with college acceptance, rather than only claiming it with no evidence. As a whole, the statistics, helped make my unessay more believable and trustworthy.
Since the unessay can dramatically vary in length, for some genres/mediums require less content than others, is creativity a major factor in our success when writing it?
Was my view toward IB slightly too opinionated? If so, besides using statistics, how can I prevent this from occurring?
Were all of my arguments strong? Were some stronger than others, or did they all have the same level of impact on the reader?
Overall, I am quite proud of this paper. I felt that I did a good job in including a lot of emotion into this piece, shown through my reaction toward specific factors of the IB program. Also, I believe that my validity in this piece was good, for the topic that I chose is very recent in my life, enabling me to be much more specific rather than broad when discussing it. I believe that my passion and my experience of this subject made it a good piece.
Tyler Andrews