The largest revision that needed to be made to my unessay was bringing in more research and not solely focusing on my personal experiences and opinions. During the in-class revision, Michaela’s piece of advice to me was to explain, in more detail, how other universities prepare teachers. Due to this, I included more information on the education program at the University of Washington. This strengthened my argument and made my piece more credible because I was no longer only arguing that teachers coming from Gonzaga are prepared well, it’s universal in our society. After reading about two very different institutions, and hearing about my first-hand experience in becoming a teacher, I believe my audience will begin to open their minds to see other factors that come into play with underperforming low income schools.
The most important aspect of my piece that may need some advising is my audience. I wrote the piece aimed at the Spokane public in general because education is an issue that relates to almost everyone and Title-1 schools are very present here in Spokane. I’m not sure if I was clear in my piece about who would benefit from my writing. Along with this, is my purpose clear? I’m hoping to open people’s minds about the reality of individuals in the teaching profession. Finally, was an article the best way to portray my ideas?
As a whole, I’m very proud of my article. I believe that I organized my ideas well and I included a solid amount of personal stories as well as research. I think that my passion for teaching, specifically at low-income schools, came out throughout my writing and that can make a piece of text much more influential. Compared to other work I’ve completed, I believe this piece is one of my better ones because I got a meaningful message through to my audience as well as broadened my own knowledge that will clearly help me in my future.
Ava Welch