The text that you are reading wasn’t the 1st copy of this. In fact it is actually the 3rd draft of the original. Many revisions were put into place while constructing this final draft. I got revisions from my friends and family. I asked my sister, Sarah, to review the letter and she told me to make some changes such as taking out the multiple facts that I had and encouraged me to further explain some quotes. From my friends I was told to add a couple of key sentences that they believed would make it stronger. My friends that helped me were my friends from home, Beth and Megan. Making these changes has affected my paper in a positive way. While re-reading through I have found that the adjustments that I had made has strengthened my letter.
After re-reading, reviewing, revising this letter multiple times I have come to the point where I can’t “see” the mistakes that need to be revised. What I mean by this is that I have read through it so many times that all the words and letters seem to be molded together now. I know what I am trying to say, so it is difficult to look at it with a fresh set of eyes. With this, my question to the readers are what can I work on? Specifically, what in my letter am I struggling to grasp? Do I need to change something else? Is there a sense of voice that I could enhance to reach the audience? Please help me so that I can become a better writer and a better author.
In the end I believe my letter was very influential could help most high school students decide what they truly want to do with their next few years. The purpose of this letter was to help high school students see both sides of the spectrum and allow them to make the final decision by themselves, without blindly accepting the opinions of others. I’m most proud of helping the youth of our community. The youth today are going to be the people who will run our country in 30 years so it is important that they are prosperous and successful. I believe my biggest strength is connecting with the audience. I shined through the strategy of being completely honest with the high schoolers. Honesty is the best policy, especially at such a young age. Honesty is one of those things that kids are dependent on. This work is one of my favorite pieces of writing because I was able to write with purpose and passion. Instead of being tied down by requirements and other barriers, I was able to write how I wanted to write while also writing for a cause I saw beneficial – helping the future of America.
-Joshua Bradley